A short poem by me...if you would be so kind as to give comments...?

I like it! I think its really good, the colors are very vivid in my mind with the bone lace against dark hair and bright red blood, the only thing I would say is to connect your ideas a little more some of these tjmhings like the feel of coldness and the lace I don't know why they are in there or what you are trying to say by saying that, but otherwise great!